Reviews for A Song Of Forgotten Beauty

BY : JayDee


  • From swirlingdoubt on July 11, 2018

    Dropping a note to say I read this one! It says written for a prompt, and it seems less inspired than usual for you - very little depth into the motivations, short, somewhat lacking in details - but I enjoyed it anyway. Greek mythology lends well to any coupling becoming plausible, what with every Greek figure getting it on with pretty much anyone. I was curious how you'd handle the setting.

    favorite lines:

    "a simple cloth covered his empty sockets" - that seals the image pretty well.

    "batting playfully at each other’s talon tipped fingers to snatch him from one to the other while their songs rose in pitch and intensity." - talon tipped fingers (maybe a hyphen should be there) and snatch behaves like onomatopoeia with the "tch" sounds.

     



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  • From ANON - Anon on July 07, 2015

    Wow. Just... wow. I'm absolutely amazed by this one, JD. Seriously, this is probably one of the finest short works I've ever read. There's a timeless feeling to the night, and the passions are so raw, and so tender at the same time. Phineus captivated me, and the Harpies are magnificent, all their fury spent to leave room for something even more primal. And the ending... that was simply the perfect touch.

    You know, I actually forgot I was reading a prompt response. You used the words so effortlessly, and that's a hallmark of your skill as a writer. Gorgeous, start to finish.

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  • From NecroNOMNOMicon on July 04, 2015

    Nicely done. I never would have thought that Phineus would harbor lust for the creatures who forced him to starve for all those years. But then again, the early stories said the harpies were attractive (presumably the parts that had lady parts) and so... why not?

    On a personal notes, I could never use Aello in a story such as this, because, well... "Aello" makes me think of Danny Aiello, and the image of a creature that is half bird/half Danny Aiello is too horrible to contemplate!

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  • From pippychick on July 04, 2015

    Wonderful writing, it was just like being there. The King came across really well, and you nailed that sense of haughty nobility in him. There was a good fantastical atmosphere. I really liked the description of the noises the sisters made, and the feel of the feathers. I'm not sure you met the requirement of 'horrific' though, I think you probably surpassed it. It's more a feeling of dark unease that grows in you, even after you've finished reading, because you wrote it so well, I neglected to notice how unnatural it really is. Until you mentioned the eggs, of course. Well done!

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