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Reviews for The swan and the Goldfinch

By : Madettica
  • From Nem on January 10, 2005
    3rd chapter.

    Nice. A bit short, though, but I guess you saw that.
    You're making her even more special... Interesting... I hope the next chapter will be from her POV.
    Well there's not much more to say. Extremely graceful and formal language. Poetic metaphors and similies, that enhance both appearance and the tone... The most striking is of course "as if she were a doe in some peaceful forest clearing not to be spooked".
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  • From Nem on January 10, 2005
    2nd chapter.
    I think your tone is great for Asher. For Anita's point of view you can't use it, it's too formal, not enough "what the hell", tired and beaten. Interesting with a sidhe weretiger - I hope you'll explain how that came about :).
    I like your formulation here: "The battle scars of self-hatred... " but I hope you see that language like that doesn't work for Anita.
    Asher does indeed seem intrigued by Rose (as I guess the OC is called :)
    It was a smooth transition between the chapters. And it's very good that you introduce all characters, Padma, Raina, Elizabeth etc. to eliminate confusion :).

    I'd liek more details about the end of Anita and Jean-Claude... but maybe that's just me :).
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  • From Nem on January 10, 2005
    Review based on first chapter.
    Hmm.. Interesting.
    Not quite the tone of the books, but that might be a good thing.
    I'll read more and see if it'll get me hooked.

    you changed the title and summary while I read, and now it seems like a different story :)
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  • From ANON - JJ on January 08, 2005
    Very interesting! More please. I wonder about the seeming break between chapters 3 & 4. You go from her waking and ready to attack to her esconced in the Circus. What happened to smooth the transition. What does she do, how does she find her place? I like that the story is from Asher's point of view, makes it more original. You've got a great premise here and I can't wait to see what you do with it.
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  • From ANON - yakuit on January 03, 2005
    Goody another chapter and so soon... but oh so short
    write soon I really like where you are going with this
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  • From ANON - yakuit on January 02, 2005
    Wow - fantastic I am absolutely hooked hope you write more soon very very soon


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  • From ANON - Crecy on December 30, 2004
    I've really enjoyed your story so far.
    Please update soon!!


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  • From ANON - JJ on December 18, 2004
    You have an interesting set up. A sidhe-weretiger being chased by Padma in Jean Claud's circus. I like how you bypassed him in honor of Asher. He's not that well utilized so you can go in many directions with him as your main character. Is he going to be your romantic lead? Will Padma attack the circus for her? Why does he want her so badly, besides the fact that she is a sidhe? I hope you plan to write more. You are at the point where your story can go in many directions. Good work. P.S. the typos detract from enjoying your writing.
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  • From ANON - Johannafulls on September 28, 2004
    Wow. That's very good. How, it, it would be more suited to an original fic, unless you're not trying to follow LKH's style. It's too formal for her style, but I really like your style. It's a good story, too. Excellent discription of the were's eye. It would be nice if we knew better who was talking.

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