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Reviews for Into my Darkness she Came

By : Moris
  • From AllannaStone on June 30, 2012
    nice. pleasy sneezy update soon!!!
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  • From on November 20, 2005
    well, it was good, and i know she loved erik, but it all seemed kind of . . .idk, it just didnt really work for me. if mme.juiny or whatever only had girls in her brothel at age 14 1/2, why did erik go there? you made it plain that he did not think it moral to have sex with a minor, so why did he contradict himself?

    i thought the plot was good, but rather weak on certain standpoints. but rest assured, if you work at it, you will get better.

    good job! =)
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  • From ANON - xxxxx on November 08, 2005
    are you like ever going to update? Please do soon!
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  • From ANON - Ultrahotpink on October 18, 2005
    Good attempt, but you definetly need to get yourself a BETA, or at the very least a good spell check program. There is definate promise here however!
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  • From ANON - C on October 17, 2005
    Very Good Story So Far! I hope you update soon!

    -C
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  • From ANON - xxxxx on October 16, 2005
    Still Very GOOD! Can't wait for the next update

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  • From ANON - FunkyPixieChick on October 15, 2005
    I think this a great story, good characters and a novel concept, but I do have some suggestions of what you could fix. The spelling is sometimes off; not too bad, I've seen much worse, but a little editing or spell checking could fix it. The sentences are a little choppy and short, and it makes the flow of the story a little bit slow, but again, nothing too bad. Lastly, and this is my biggest issue, is when you are explaining the songs, Remember and Learn to Be Lonely. It really breaks the mood of the story when you put parenthesis in the middle of the story, and if you do feel the need to mention the song names (it truthfully doesn't matter, but it's really cool that you write songs), you might want to put an asterisk next to the word, then give an explanation at the bottom. I really enjoy reading this story, and I don't want you to interpret this as a flame or anything, I just know that there is so much potential with your innovative idea. Good luck!
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  • From ANON - Chanteur De Opera on October 15, 2005
    Oh this is soooo good You need to update ASAP! I like the character Maxim hehehe sounds like Erik is a bit jealous of him...I wonder what will happen...Any who lol UPDATE SOON!
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  • From ANON - xxxx on October 15, 2005
    YAY YOU UPDATED!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait for the next update! This is verry good! You write well!
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  • From ANON - xxxxx on October 15, 2005
    Please update soon!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Horsegal98 on October 14, 2005
    This story has potential, I am hooked! But please remember to do a spell check before you post the chapters. Great work!

    -Mel
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  • From ANON - Lily on October 11, 2005
    intesting. please add more soon
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