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By : secretlysecretly
  • From ANON - BRP on July 07, 2006
    “I told you to wait!” his deep voice reverberated in the grand hallway.

    She mentally shook herself and spoke with as much conviction as she could muster. “I do not follow orders Monsieur. I thought this insignificant detail would have become apparent to you by now.”

    She turned on her heel, grasping the door mantle hurriedly, frantic to get as far away from this man as possible. However, before she realized it, an arm snaked its way around her waist and her body was crushed to his hard length.

    “You will learn that when I make a request of you, you are not to question me.” he hissed in her ear.

    O_o!!!

    =Fans herself and faints=



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  • From ANON - BRP on July 07, 2006
    I could be wrong, but you may need commas in some sentences.
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  • From ANON - BRP on July 07, 2006
    “Good afternoon, monsieur”, greeted him Vincent, his butler.

    This phrase sounds okay. Yet at the same time, it does not. Keep it or correct it, if u like.



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  • From ANON - Blackrosephantom on July 07, 2006
    Done reading the first chapter. So far, so good. I liked that Erik acknowledged his errors, resolved to better himself, had faith in hope, etc. I like the references to Dante's works.


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  • From ANON - EternalxDarkness on June 27, 2006
    so good! please continue right away!
    =D
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  • From ANON - LuciaArden on June 23, 2006
    Truely a wonderful chapter. I eagerly await the next.
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  • From ANON - LuciaArden on June 21, 2006
    A truely wonderful story, my dear. I cannot wait for the next installments.



    ~Lucia
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  • From ANON - nightscribe on June 19, 2006
    "She caught a glimpse of his loins" that phrase killed me (in a good way). Although I'm a Leroux purist when it comes to Erik, I realize yours is Gerard Butler based (and that is not a problem, he's a sinfully delectable piece of eye candy), so the bathing au natural works; Leroux's Erik would be too inhibited I believe. I do like his invitation to Marianne, a reminder of Erik's wit and humor from the novel; nice blend of genres/characterizations for that scene.
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  • From ANON - Nightscribe on June 17, 2006
    I've held off reviewing, but now after five chapters, I thought I'd leave some thoughts. First; your story is well written and I got a good mental image of the French countryside and the estates, (I love good visuals) but for some reason, I'm not connecting with the characters, especially Marianne. She comes across as an independent 21st century woman, and that pulls me out of the story. A Victorian era lady, especially a duchess, I believe, would behave with cool civility, even when in the company of someone she hated. I realize she is supposed to be young and headstrong, (the counterpart to the somewhat daft and naive Christine) but I have yet to warm up to her.

    My other main issue is conflict; there really isn't any. Yes, Erik and Marianne have gotten off on the wrong foot, but I keep waiting for something to happen, other than the I hate you/I'm drawn to you thing. After the first few chapters, I was intrigued at the possibilities. For instance; a duchess, expected to marry a baron; do they already know Raoul, the viscount? I was hoping for an extremely uncomfortable dinner or garden party with the de Chagneys being introduced to Marianne's new neighbor (could you imagine?) Also, the Dante reference. Has Erik built a new torture chamber in his estate, modeled after the nine circles of hell? Will one of the de Chagneys find themselves there (you said the story was not Christine friendly); will Marianne act as Erik's Beatrice, or will she be seduced by darkness and help him get his revenge? That's what I mean by conflict.

    I'll keep reading; I'm interested to see where this might go.


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  • From ANON - Courtney on June 17, 2006
    Your Story is beautifully written and I enjoyed reading these first five chapters. Please update soon, I am dying to know what happens next.
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