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By : LadyNarayamaan

From reaper07 on May 13, 2009
Oh yeah, you updated! :)

I loved it. Their relationship is so intense and so confusing at the same time. He better imprinted on her and doesn't realize it yet. ;)

It was really great. It was hot and also a little sad because they both fight their demons and yet they find comfort in each other. I love it.

Hoffe, du postest bald ein neues Kapitel. :)
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From ANON - Ultra on May 11, 2009
that was hot! Can�t wait whats coming next...
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From InfernalParadise on May 10, 2009
Alright, my brain is back on think-modus, so here�s the proper review:
YOU laughed hard with my review?? Now honestly, woman, are you kidding?? Whenever I read your replies to my reviews, they like SO make my day and put a smile on my face! I just love your kind of humor. ;)

Oh God, please, please don�t let this wonderful story make me turn into a �Team Jacob� supporter� I�d never get my story posted if I decide to switch teams now. *lol* And Edward would probably sulk for days, getting wrinkles and everything. He�s such a diva. *rolls eyes* I don�t want you taking him up in your �my imaginative derails and do �bad� stuff to him�, either, by the way. That�s already MY job, understood?! You can walk around and make Jacob forget that he�s got a brain and let him do nice thingies instead to make us support the �Team Cold Shower�, but keep your fingers off of Mr. Cullen. *looks VERY stern*

I also think the POV changes were excellently done. Especially in this story I find it highly interesting to see things from both (or more) sides. Don�t worry, hun. You�re doing so well that I�m slowly running out of words to praise you. ;)

By the way, this is what happens when someone's too stupid to write one looooong review: they just write three. ;P
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From InfernalParadise on May 10, 2009
Won�t review anyway as I absolutely hate you because this chapter was so brilliantly done in expressions and words that I feel like a little, untalented maggot. :'(
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From InfernalParadise on May 10, 2009
Can�t� review� need cold shower. Need to� turn� brain� on� again�
WOW!!!
*breathless*

(but a 100% sure that founding this new religion with worshipping you was the right thing! *lol*)
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From reaper07 on May 06, 2009
The wait was so worth it. That was .. seriously .. no words .. so hot. Woah, I absolutely loved it.
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From ANON - Ultra on May 03, 2009
OHHH again you let us waiting for more after a great chapter!You are so creative and you are keeping the story so interesting and not corny at all. Hopefully there are coming some of J�s POV!!
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From InfernalParadise on May 02, 2009
RN: God. Damn � YES! You. Have. EVERY. Reason. To. Be. Proud. Of. This. Chapter. Yummy, yummy, yummy. Again, I bow to your way with words (I�m so jealous and I really, really hate you big time for it cuz I wish I could write that way� *sulks*)
Oh, I SO immediately knew it was only a dream, but some tiny voice inside my head kept hoping it wouldn�t be. Well, at least the last line promises quite some smutty thingies for the next chapter (even if it�ll be seeeeeeerious smut *lol*). But I won�t admit at this point that that fact makes me jump around in joy� cuz that�d be embarrassing. No, won�t admit it. O_o

Since there�s no such thing as a long review, here�s a loooonger one. ;)
Hello, twin sister of development freakiness and lip biting. *bows* If someone asked me about my characters, I�d even tell them the shampoo they use and the intervals of their toilet uses (which I wouldn�t give away, though, since those are privates thingies of my characters and I surely don�t want to get sued�). Besides, if it only were for the lip biting, I�d be happy. O_o I once wrote on a story at some good friend�s place, and she said she couldn�t watch me without laughing. I was constantly switching between rolling my eyes, looking grumpy, doing puppy eyes, extending my not-very-existent fangs, coming close to tears and raising my eyebrow with a smirk when it got smutty. Am just so glad I never did any �Lord of the Rings� stuff� I would have probably grown pointy ears and a beard while doing so. *shivers*

One thing, though: I don�t want to disappoint you, but even if I praise you as much as I can (and for this wonderful chapter I�ll probably start a new religion called �Our Lady Narayamaan�s written Miracles� anyway), I have to admit I�m NOT huma� uhm, I mean a native speaker (honestly, I spend too much time in the Twilight universe *lol*). I�ve seen so much pathetic stuff on AFF so far, though, which was supposed to be committed by native speakers (from Mars perhaps) that I light up inside whenever I came across some story like yours. :)

No �link me to your story woman� commands to obey to yet, sorry! *lol* I haven�t posted any of that story yet (mainly because the beginning is still missing and I just can�t find it although I keep telling and scolding it to finally come out of its hiding place *sighs*), but as soon as I�ve got the first chapter(s) on, I�ll let you know, promised! It�s about Edward, though. I normally don�t like Jacob, which is why I�m newly surprised whenever I read a new chapter of your story and immediately fall in love all over again� :)

You know, if I had to pick something about this story to dislike, then the ONLY thing that comes to my mind would be Jacob calling Edward a leech. Now, really, such a little impertinent wolf. Pah! ;P
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From ANON - boban tractions on May 01, 2009
More, more, more!!! lol. I can't believe you left us with such a cliffhanger...."mine"...hmmm looks like Jacob is getting possessive of our dear Lis. I really hope she doesn't get back with that lawyer. You write very poetically. It's very beautiful. Can't wait until the next chapter!
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From InfernalParadise on April 27, 2009
You have no idea how much I love it when the reviewers get feedbacks. It�s like handing over tea and cookies to us (which the dark side does as well, of course� hehe) and encouraging us to keep on reading and reviewing. Thx! :D

Where to start� I really appreciate the fact that you�re changing the POVs and even more so that you manage to keep them very close to how your characters would think (judging by their actions). There are so many stories that have different POVs which still all sound the same. Thankfully, yours doesn�t. Which already leads me to the next plus: your characters. I like them. A lot. They hiss and glare at each other (and I don�t just mean Jacob and Lis here), throw smart, yet funny lines into each other�s face, but manage to keep the serious stuff serious.
Then, the little word games. Like all the wolf thingies or Elisa Wolfe and Jason White (vs. Jacob Black) part. Isn�t Jason White a terrible blond-lawyer-like name?? ;)
Besides, considering that I normally don�t like OC-stories a lot, I just have to admit I love this one. And the really weird thing is that I don�t even like Jacob a lot. Normally, I prefer those stories where he suffers in the background or gets stepped on. Hehe. Your Jacob Black, however, is an entirely different story. He�s just yummy. Young, confused, still mourning over Bella, but definitely yummy and incredible fun to read.
All in all, this is simply great � even without �le smut� (but I won�t complain once it starts again, don�t worry!). I can�t repeat enough how I love your way with words. It�s so hard to believe that you�re no native speaker�

As for the weirdest detail: I�m writing on an OC story myself that includes the �I suffer from your scent� stopic as well. Made me laugh quite a few times during reading your chapters since I always bite my lip too and also find myself in the scent-topic at the moment. ;)

Ewww, look at my never-ending blether � so sorry for that terribly long review! o_O
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From ANON - Ultra on April 25, 2009
I like the chapter a lot, you really created a cool new character.After reading your update I m always like- ohhh already over- I wanne have more to read. Compliment for your english, I m not a native speaker either and couldn�t write like that.
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From ANON - Bee on April 24, 2009
Thank you so much for updating so fast. I love Lis, she seems really sweet and I like how all her painting is inspired by aboriginal art and then she meets Jacob! Classic. Does Lis have any aboriginal blood in her? That would be a funny coincidence.
I really hope she is Jacob's imprint so that if he tries to leave her, he will come back because I couldn't bare Lis getting heartbroken by Jacob....I really love your plot line and the chemistry that you describe! It is very hot and passionate and just very exhilarating for a reader. Love this story!!
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From reaper07 on April 23, 2009
Yay, a new chapter.

It was a little short but I'm not complaining. It's better than nothing, huh? :)

I really liked it. I love how they tease each other and seem to be at ease with each other after such a short time yet they still feel awkward and everything is new. I really like it.

Hmm, now Jacob is staying with her. It's going to be interesting. ;) Can we expect any steamy scenes soon? Heheh.

Take care and update soon!
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From ANON - Bee on April 22, 2009
wow that was amazing. The way you write the passion between Lis and Jacob is electrifying. Is Lis his soulmate? Is that why he can't resist her? I hope it works out...I have feeling that Lis will fall deeply in love with Jacob, I hope he realizes that before he lets Bella cloud his mind. LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!! Please update soon.
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From ANON - Ultra on April 21, 2009

OOhhh update soon again-please!!!!So far chapter 3 is my favourite-, but the other parts are great too. I love it when you use Jacob POV and switch between both of them and that you take everything slow. Maybe you can make him try harder to win her over.
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