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Reviews for I Wish I Could Read Your Mind...

By : DeeLish
  • From flameshadowblack on December 05, 2010
    This was really good and hot now how do you favorite stuff on here?
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  • From Blahsblah2001 on May 04, 2009
    Good vocabulary, it's nice to read a story that isn't riddled with grammar and spelling errors. The story flows, as well, but the beginning might need a little re-working. Don't get me wrong, violent rape can be hot and useful, and Jacob will do a lot of things to get what he wants... but I don't think he'd ever strangle it out of her. He loves her too much for that.
    That having been said, the speed with which she goes from completely unwilling rape victim to willing and excited sexual partner might point toward an ongoing theme. Is this a game they play? I understand it's a dream, but not knowing at the time, I was a bit confused.
    Other than that... kitchen goes from hot to cold, and Jake's fingers were cold, even though he runs a steady 108 degrees.... maybe in the dream she was misinterpreting someone else's hand? Eh?
    And, yeah, expect about one review for every five hundred or so views. It's actually kind of predicable. I mean, what can people really say after reading about what was basically sex? "Oh, yes, I very much liked the description of Jacob's cock, excellent imagery." Or maybe "I very much enjoyed masturbating to your writing, please write more soon?"
    Really, I'm sometimes glad more people don't review.
    That having been said you can get more reviews by enabling anonymous reviews, I forget how to do this though. Oh, and posting more chapters helps a lot, too.

    And do you mind me asking where you're writing from? Just because you used some slang I'm not familiar with. Something with a q, I don't remember, but I've definitely never heard it before.
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  • From ANON - Night on April 26, 2009
    I enjoyed your story but some of the gramer at the start was off and Jacob was too rough, but i loved it and would like you to tup up the next chap
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  • From Emeraldfires on April 23, 2009
    That was the hottest dream ever!!!
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  • From LadyNarayamaan on April 20, 2009
    *grins in epic proportions*
    GRAWR!

    Love the way this was written. Can not say much more, am still replaying it in my mind, and, pardon the lack of better terms and lexicon: DAMN!

    A little bit of needless but nevertheless interesting information: the validation of this review has two words, random as we know, but very proper at the moment: the twitch. AH, that ripped a laugh from me. XD
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  • From shayneandspike on April 17, 2009
    My, oh my! Imagine Jacob had a similar dream and remembers it in Edward's presence... That would be quite the sequel! I love how varied your vocabulary is, it's reflected in your writing. It's very enjoyable! -Shayne
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