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  • From Songoftime on September 05, 2009
    After reading this and Music, I think that you should work on your romantic development some more. I thought it was a touch hasty in Music, but not bad. Here, I agree with the earlier poster who used the movie as an example. It seemed to me that the two fell in love just because you said so. Your emotional manipulation was much better in Music. I'm not trying to be harsh. Just giving you feedback...sorry if I focus too much on the negative, but I think it helps development more than focusing on the positive. I think it's a good story, and I'll continue to follow it. I'm a bad critic and a worse writer, so my opinion may be meaningless.
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  • From InfernalParadise on September 03, 2009
    I have to admit, chapter 15 made me shed a few tears. I could relate so well to Whitaker. And it helped how you described the place in the woods and everything... I swear I could hear the birds sing and could smell the grass. ;)

    And isn't love the greatest thing in the words, especially when it shows up in a fanfic with Jasper and Whitaker?? I absolutely adored that smut scene. FINALLY! *lol* You did really well on that, hun. :D

    "Well, yeah, since we’re v—"... oh, now that was close, hu? ;) I honestly can't wait for Jasper's coming out. I so want to see Whitaker's reaction.
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  • From InfernalParadise on September 03, 2009
    “… while I drifted through the house, like a lost soul looking for a resting place” – that was utterly beautiful. :)
    And of course, Emmett had to be emmettly silly by the end of chapter 13. *lol*

    I loved those last two chapters. They were sweet and very calm. I guess that’s why Jasper is just the perfect character for Whitaker: he’s calm and not as hyper as other Cullen members. ;) I’m a bit scared for Whitaker, though. If they continue this “we approach the smut-scene” action, then who says Jasper won’t accidentally lose his control and bite down on him one day? Not that I’d mind… hehe.

    Aha! Finally, we’ve found the culprit for the “I need a name with W”-issue. Bad Alice. No wonder you made her leave Jasper… ;)

    As for my almighty input on the female OC (my, my, you want me to come up with a lot of things… don’t you think you’ll overwork my little, feeble brain?? *lol*): mind if we move that to the level of email? That way, I believe we could exchange both our brilliant and completely silly ideas better. It’s up to you, though. No pressure applied here. If you agree, however, you’ll find my email address on my profile (MSN)… feel free to contact me whenever you want! :)
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  • From ANON - Antigone on September 01, 2009
    Very nice story so far. About Whitaker's memory though: Will there be more on that? Is his forgetfulness just how he is, or is there something more?
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  • From ANON - certaintragedy on September 01, 2009
    Very interesting story! Looking forward to more.
    Thanks for your hard work.
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  • From elvinwitch on August 30, 2009
    I like it but i still think Music is better. This one seems more distant. It's not the right word but it's the best I can think up of. Don't get me wrong I always look forward to your updates and it's a good story.
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  • From Kaie on August 27, 2009
    Well ty for the review of my story. Lol, I told you I was inspired and i'm like in love with Jasper. Keep it up, I like where you're going with this story. The chapters are a smidge short, but you're super quick with updates so it makes up for it, lol. Keep it up!
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  • From Kaie on August 26, 2009
    OH YAY AN UPDATE!!! ME SO HAPPY! Lol, gee thanks a lot! now you are making me want to write, and I have other stories to finish! I really hope you write more jasper fanfics I love him! He's an amazing character. Keep this one up it's hella good! Update soon please!!!
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  • From InfernalParadise on August 26, 2009
    Oh my, you're so busy with posting new chapters. Makes me feel ashamed since I still haven't posted my first chapter... I'm so lazy these days. And it's not completely done yet, either, which is a good excuse. o_O

    "like the wall that was Emmett." *lol* Yes, that must be a fitting description.
    And... wow, Edward really had some humor in this chapter. Hehe.

    I can relate to Whitaker looking for his already dead grandfather. Even months after gran's death, mom would catch herself wanting to call her when there was some news. It's hard to get that out of your system, and it certainly takes time. I think you wrote that part very well. It seemed so real, I kinda felt a lump in my throat...
    Of course, the little slash smut was nice, too. :)

    Don't worry about me, I LOVE drama and angsty stuff. ^_^ And about the Emmet story... whoa, you're really asking ME for my humble input? O.O Uhm, I'd say the OC should be female cuz in my eyes, Emmett's just not the slash guy. I could be wrong, though. I've always had this kind of fantasy that if Emmett ever came across an OC, it'd probably be during playing some sport, like at school. Dunno why. Otherwise, I'm afraid I'm no big help for great ideas. Sorry. ;)
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  • From InfernalParadise on August 25, 2009
    *sobs* Lots of wonderful drama, but I'm still sorry for his grandfather. He seemed to be a cool person. :(
    At least, he met the rest of the family. And strangely, just when I was writing a review for some Linkin Park record on amazon, you mention their concert. Again, you were just reading my mind, you naughty thing. *lol*

    Inspiration for an Emmett story? Oh, now THAT sounds interesting. I wouldn't know what to write about him apart from him being painfully straight forward, wrestling with other people and grinning. ;)
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  • From Kaie on August 25, 2009
    OH HELLA LAME!!!! killing his gpa on his bday! Meanie!!! Ok... seriously you gotta update!!!! like now! LOL, it's a good story I like it quite a bit. It's a bit fast paced but I really do enjoy it. Please keep updating.
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  • From KathrynH on August 25, 2009
    Aww, I got a little teary when Whit explained about the tickets. *sniffle* Emmett was suprisingly tactful there too.

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  • From InfernalParadise on August 21, 2009
    "My grandfather, the protector of my virtue." *lol* I love those funny lines of yours.

    Do I sense Jasper's coming out in one of the next chapters? I'm so looking forward to that as I honestly don't know how Whitaker's gonna react.
    Thx for the cyber hanky. You're too sweet. ;)

    I'm in for any Emmett story you may come up with. Emmett is plain fun. He's got that annoying habit of being unembarrassedly honest and straight forward which is most hilarious to read...
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  • From InfernalParadise on August 20, 2009
    Awwww, how sweet. Where's a hanky? ;)

    Can awkwardness be great? I mean, it was amazing to read, so perhaps it was a lovely kind of awkwardness...
    I'm slowly turning into a weird sort of Jasper fan. I must stop this... I can't keep falling in love with every character you create or use. *lol* Don't worry, though, I'm definitely unable to stop reading whatever you post, hun. :D
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  • From InfernalParadise on August 18, 2009
    Poor Whitaker. *hands over pain killers*
    Was it just me or did anyone else immediately have "the football players love to torture me" line from Good Charlotte's "I heard you" on their mind, too? ;)

    By the way, I just loved that little paragraph, starting with "'Where are you going?' he asked.". It was simply hilarious. :)

    Awww, you're too kind. Thanks for being such a regular poster, then. :D
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