Reviews for Jenny From The PondBy : JayDee |
I hadn't realized until recently that mythological stories went under "Books" here, and I certainly wasn't expecting to see a story featuring Jenny Greenteeth, who I always thought was one the creepier folktales out there.
As always, you're very good at quickly establishing characters and making me feel like I know them, and here this includes both Zach and, to an extent, Jenny herself. The word count limit kind of hurts how much can actually happen, as well as how much the water hag's slow, creeping menace can be emphasized, but within those confines I think you did quite well.
As always, there's a bit of humor in here as well, with Zach's hilarious misunderstanding of what's going on. Sure, there's a horrifying flesh-eating thing crawling out of the pond toward him, but she must just be angry that he moved that rock!
Finally, I really liked the little detail of the weed covering the pond. Not only does it serve to hide Jenny, but it incorporates the fact that apparently Jenny's name is often used as a word for duckweed and over water-covering plants.
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