Reviews for The VisitorBy : sevissexy |
Nicely done. Interestingly, while I'm extremely curious as to how Bella and Jasper came to be who they are in this story, as neither fits their canon personas, I walk away from the story with the feeling that while I may want to know, I don't need to for the story to be complete. It was engaging.
One point though; you stated that his precome is venomous? Yet he has claimed her body numerous times. Was there simply not enough to turn her, or was it because he did not feed from her in prior encounters that she remained human?
I look forward to seeing what else you come up with.
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