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Reviews for The swan and the Goldfinch

By : Madettica
  • From ANON - MarzBar on January 17, 2006
    Nice smutty chapter. I still hope they can protect Rose from Padma.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on December 16, 2005
    I just read Chapter 7 and feel like I missed it at some point. I am waiting for the smut but really hope JC and Asher can protect her from Padma and all others who would use her and abuse her.
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  • From ANON - Snowfall on November 24, 2005
    OMG! All three! What a joyous day in the arms of two lovely vampires. Wouldn't that be so nice. Will Anita be pissed? Please don't let her break up the fun. Can't wait for your next chappie! And still, beautifully written.

    Snowfall
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on November 15, 2005
    Happy to see this story is back! I hope Jean Claude and Asher can protect the beautiful Rose from Padma. Can they mate or give her marks or something? More story please.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on September 20, 2005
    Thanks for the update. I'll be looking for more of this fanciful fic.
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  • From ANON - Snowfall on September 05, 2005
    I like this story very much. You have a way of blending your words into beautiful imagery. What you did with Asher and Rose was absolutely wonderful. I was so glad that Jean Claude was not angry with Asher. Well, he doesn't seem to be yet.

    The fic is advancing at an unhurried gradual pace during which time you are developing the characters nicely. You have carefully laid the groundwork of an interesting plot. Considering that one of your main characters is swanmane/sidhe and somehow a white tiger, I am anxious to see what you have planned. This promises to be an exciting story and I hope you choose to continue despite the odd reviews.

    I do hope you continue this fic. It is on my browser's favorites.

    Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave

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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 23, 2005
    Thank you for the Rose POV. Once again, I am ashamed to be a human. Our species can be so cruel. More please, some nice smut or love?
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 22, 2005
    I think you know by now that I love this story but, after that last chapter I must say, YOU ARE AN EVIL TEASE!!
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 21, 2005
    How did she get her old scars, i.e., the cigarette burns, etc.? Were those different than the Asher scars and pain? I hope there is some easy way to heal her, like making love to Asher again now that he is healed. More soon please.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 20, 2005
    I'm here, faithfully waiting for more. I hate to see Rose in so much pain.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 19, 2005
    OMG! Did the beautiful Rose take all of Asher's pain and scars into herself and heal him? If so, Padma and everyone else will want her and try to take her. She can heal all the victims of the Council member's sick games. More soon please.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on April 09, 2005
    YOW! Who is this beautiful Tiger? Can Asher help her? Why does the creep Padma want her. BTW, nice smut.
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  • From ANON - Crecy on January 17, 2005
    I wonder what Padma wants from her... Please update soon!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 10, 2005
    hmmmm things are starting to heat up... wonder where you are going with this?????????
    Anyhow nice chapter with a nice pace....I have a feeling this is going to be bitter sweet... poor Asher
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  • From Nem on January 10, 2005
    4th chapter...
    You need to advance faster with the plot, or else you'll lose readers.
    It's interesting how you write it, but there's not much to it yet.
    You've established both characters (though maybe not too clearly the insecurity of Asher).
    I'd like some insight into Rose (as I guess she's called), especially since you're going to write steamy scenes from her perspective. I guess you'll be focusing on their relationship (errr... sex ;), but soon you'll need to give us some background.
    "The Swan and the Goldfinch" sounds interesting (maybe a tad poetic and too saccharine, but we'll see) but as of yet I cannot tie it to the story.

    Okay, so you'll keep it completely in Asher's voice? Even the steamy bits? (Reading your comment). Flashbacks sounds nice, but from Asher's point-of-view - that sounds cumbersome. I'd write them from Rose's... Probably starting with "when I first arrived here at the Circus of the Damned" making some comments about Asher, and then bringing in Padma, Anita and then the whole background. I'd probably do some childhood memories (but since I don't know where you're going with this, I'm not sure that would fit in) just to set some "I always knew I was different" -tone to it.
    Will this tie in to the Merry Gentry story? Or will you just keep the Sidhe world without Merry. (Since LKH doesn't put them in relation, it might be hard to do such a crossover universe).
    I have to say it's quite hard when you say you're not going to have any "action". It will be quite hard to keep the story running if you continue like this, with only Asher's commenting thoughts. You don't have to have fighting action, just so that things happen as we read and not always has happened... But that might be an original, new take on it of course ;).

    Well, good luck continuing writing. I'll hopefully check in from time to time for a comment :P
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