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Reviews for The Adventure of the Exceptional Girl

By : Lianne
  • From BarnabasFrid on August 04, 2009
    Total crap; you have no clue how to write ANY of the characters; your grammar is horrid. Fot Christ's sake... just take this SHIT off the site!
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  • From Lianne on August 09, 2007
    mmmkay. i haven't even looked at this story for like 2 years. oh and yes, i've read the canon, but thanks for asking. i hope you realize that this is a fanfiction site and not a fiction/canon site.

    oh and i know the formatting blows. like i said, i haven't even looked it for 2 years. i ran out of ideas for this before i even wrote it, basically. oh well. maybe someday i'll be inspired.

    ~Lucifera Black
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  • From T00bs on July 04, 2007
    Have you even read the Canon?

    What is this garbage??

    Holmes is supposed to be a cold, calculating, automaton and you turn into a sex crazed maniac who screws the new girl.

    Excellent sex scene, by the way, i could TOTALLY sense the RAW EMOTION.

    Please, honey, for all our sakes, get a BETA.
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  • From Susana on January 17, 2007
    Interesting turn in this fic, and i am very happy youhas update.
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  • From ANON - Aeris on October 14, 2006
    I know I'm not one to judge chapter uploading, but that is seriously a long time to wait before updating a story. I know I'm guilty of it myself, but never nearly two years later. It definitely screams of you trying to dodge the flames, which might be avoided if you upload the next chapter and continue the story? I'm looking forward to reading more, if you want to write more. Slash is okay, but Holmes/Watson is starting to get overdone and this is a nice breath of fresh air.
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  • From ANON - Kaye Price on July 14, 2006
    It's been awhile since you worked on your story, but I hope you will take it up again...I enjoyed what I read, and you sound very keen to take advice about how to develop your story and characters!. I hope you are not discouraged by HoneyB's cruel remarks...keep writing!!! If HoneyB was such a ACD purist, he/she would know that Doyle wouldn't be at all happy to see what is being written about his characters. Our Holmes/Watson fanfic isn't meant to be an extension of The Canon....it's enjoyment. Keep writing :))
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  • From ANON - Susana on January 28, 2006
    Exepcional story, muy buena in my lenguage. Please update, please update, is very sexy, I am exausted of slash I love sherlock + Girls, and your account is very good.
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  • From ANON - IndieShins on September 22, 2005
    Very sexy. I thought I was the only girl that was turned on by Serlock Homes; Maybe it's that smart, romantic thing he has going. My boyfriend thought it was wierd- I dumped him last week.

    Can't wait to read the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - HoneyB on September 15, 2005
    ....Have you ever actually *read* Sherlock Holmes?

    I wouldn't be surprised if you haven't. Your characterization of the great detective made me want to hurl. You obviously have no grasp on his character whatsoever, nor do you seem to even care about doing him justice. You just invented a beautiful character with no personality or special traits whatsoever and threw her into bed with the normally untouchable Holmes because that's what YOU want to do. Please, stop tarnishing Sir Conan Doyle's brilliant work with your mediocre rubbish and grow the hell up.
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  • From ANON - Sinister on May 12, 2005
    You should be congratulated. Your story can safely be seperated from all the other Sherlock Holmes stories. You achieved a very hard goal. You mimed Doyle's style and dialog, and you did it tastefully. You really do have it down to an art. Cudos to you.
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  • From ANON - Nee on March 18, 2005
    Yes, i think you should rearrange it when you have a mystery figured out perhaps...I like the character of Annie because Holmes is always paired with Watson and we know that just won't do! ;) The only thing I was confused about here was her "low cut" dress. This is Victorian England when proper ladies had very high collars and long skirts and left everything to the imagination unless they were parlor girls. To give Annie a dress such as this at the first meeting makes her seem either poor, cheap or both. And when she makes him an offer, one can't possibly NOT know what she means when she's thruisting her cleavage at him, lol:) I think she can really work well if you build a good story around her. Give her a little better reason to be with Holmes, to be an apprentice. Maybe just put his housekeeper out of commission so they call for someone to help him around the house while she's laid up. I think his acceptance of her would be more plausible that way. And since she will be around him a lot, she can get to know him and observe him slowly, and there can be a building of sexual tension! What do you think? I hope you do write more of this:)
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  • From ANON - Mārin on March 07, 2005
    I enjoyed this chapter very much! But are you going to continue the story, or will this be all?

    Good job!
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  • From ANON - Kath on February 19, 2005
    I really like this story. Keep writing.
    Holmes is very logical but he's still a man so if a young girl crept into his room and offered i'm sure he'd have no trouble taking her up on the offer. I don't think Annie would hold his attention for long though because she's almost like a groupy with a crush and i think she would be annoying to him after a very short time. You've described her as bright and intelligent but I didn't see much of that in this chapter. So my advise would be keep the sex but develop Annie's character further.
    I really hope you carry on with this story though cause there's hardly any Holmes fanfiction on the net and I was starting to think I was the only one who found our pipe smoker sexy. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - JJ on January 04, 2005
    You have your characters of Holmes and Watson down really well. I'm surprised that Holmes would jump into bed so quickly with such a twitter-head. Annie could be better developed to make her more interesting and believable as a partner for Holmes. I like the premis of Holmes having a relationship. Just because he's smart does not mean he has to be a monk. I look forward to seeing what your plot line will be! Where did Annie get her outfit? Is she a maid, wealthy, lost? Where are her things and what kind of family did she come from? Would Holmes be interested in a woman from his own class, the nobility, or the lower classes? Where does Annie fit into his life?
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  • From sweetelysium on December 20, 2004
    Very, very interesting. My one suggestion is to give the characters background. Why exactly is Annie exceptional, other than her looks and penchant for tramping about in a wet, low-cut dress? That's what seems most out of character for Holmes. In canon, he seems to hold little respect for anyone who isn't sharp as a tack. His sudden movements and exclamations are perfectly in character though.

    I'm the author of the other Holmes story here (which unfortunately I seem to have lost ownership of in the upgrade. Soon to be reposted so I can continue). If you want to bounce ideas/interpretations off of each other, I'd be more than happy to to talk. I do AIM and MSN Messenger. If you have either of those, let me know. :D
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