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Reviews for Heal Me

By : Firered
  • From ANON - kitsune83 on September 05, 2005
    I really like Mary. She's ballsy, but she's got facets. Keep writing! I can't wait to read more.
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  • From ANON - Nekogal on June 08, 2005
    Oh the tension, the drama, the thrill! Yoi, yoi. Very good indeed! Write more please; I want to know what happens between Asher and MJ! Please more!
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 04, 2005
    Thank you for the prompt update! Sorry for them having the bad dreams. More please.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on June 01, 2005
    Yummy dinner scene! Makes me hungry although I must admit I may be hungry for more meat than potatoes. Good to see she ran into Asher even though both of them seem to have been arrogant and stubborn at the time. I'm waiting for more please.
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  • From ANON - BelleRose, aka George Cooper on May 04, 2005
    Very nice. Very, very nicely done. I definitely liked. I can't wait for the next scene! I'm totally hooked. The idea of a female assasin who doesn't carry a gun... let's just say that she appeals to my inner femenist. Also, you might want to talk about what she uses, ie ken-po or karate or pressure points, instead of weapons, because, as a reader, I for one am interested. Also, perhaps a bit about how she met Edward or what she and Anita think about each other. For your next chapter, I am really hoping *crosses fingers for luck* to hear about how she meets Asher. Good luck, keep writing, and please continue on this story!

    -BelleRose
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  • From ANON - fanficnut on May 02, 2005
    I am LOVING this story! Pls pls keep writing! Can't wait to read the rest!
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on May 01, 2005
    Thanks for the new chapters. There are some very fine smut writers on this board. Keep reading, you'll find them.
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  • From ANON - KittyVamp on April 27, 2005
    This is a very good start. I can't wait to read more of the story.
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on April 26, 2005
    Still reading and hoping for more. I would like some clarification on some points and hope that will be coming. Is MJ the person having the dreams about Billy? Hard to tell where the action is sometimes, such as Guilty Pleasures, Anita's place or MJ's place (wherever that is). Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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  • From ANON - FallenFromGrace on April 23, 2005
    Ohh, very creepy. I also love the new addition (Mary Jane), I've been wanting a new female character in the series to lift some of the limelight off of Anita. Love Anita, but sometimes you just got to get away from her. Can't wait to see how Mare and Asher meet.
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  • From xevaral on April 20, 2005
    Okay, this chapter was better but still a little confusing. Mary Jane seemed more like an assassin this time, which is good.

    I think I'll put off the fic until you're done with this one. I want to see what happens in this one. ;)
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on April 20, 2005
    Is the stalker after our assassin now? WTF is going on? Waiting for some clarification here. Not to mention more were eye candy.
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  • From ANON - JJ on April 19, 2005
    Great for a new writer. Some trouble with grammar and flow, but a proofreader or experience will fix that. I'm a teacher, and while I can fix others work, I can't write on my own. YOU CAN!!!! Plausable set up. We meet Mary Jane (what a name). She seems to be a little trashy for Edward, so it makes me wonder if she's a natural he found, he trained her, or a professional who's gone solo. We have Asher on the rag (over what, we don't know), and someone threatening Anita while Edward is tied up elseware. All good angles that will be interesting to solve over the course of your story. I think knowing why Anita needs coverage will be pretty important to how you get MJ into their lives. What kind of threat is it that Anita can't handle it? I especially like that your story will be about Asher and MJ. I think he's been ignored lately and he has so many angles you could work off of. Thanks for your story! Please keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Leslie on April 19, 2005
    Hi! I think you did a great job for your first time. So far so good. I like how Edward already showed up *wink* he is totally great. I think your new character Mary is very cool thought. She seems so much like Anita and Edward. I wonder is she and Anita will be girlfriends. They can spend friday night having a slaughter party. Killing people and then coming home to paint their nails!! I am weird...sorry about the crazy review. I just wanted to let you know that you are doing a great job and I am totally here to support you. I can't wait for the next chapter! I hope you post it soon. Thanks for the good reading material!

    ~*Leslie*~
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  • From ANON - xevaral on April 18, 2005
    I actually had an idea of doing a story like this and then I saw this. It's interesting so far, but Anita seems a little out of character to me. And Mary Jane doesn't seem very assassing like either. Keep writing, though. :)
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