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Reviews for Scherzo

By : BellaLaura
  • From ANON - spikesbint on December 26, 2005
    hot...it may be December here in the UK, but it feels like august right now!

    SB
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  • From ANON - me on October 08, 2005
    Wow...that was soo kinky and hot...

    By the way, I'm currently playing a Schertzo!!! It's by Chopin and its really freaking long...(23 pages!!!)
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  • From ANON - Judas on October 07, 2005
    Read it again.

    And now that I wasn't astonished by the incredible intensity and some beauty I can't really put in words, I saw some details I'd prefer to be let out for this to be better.
    (I mean the beginning was still too disgusting but in the rest of this.)

    " His cock, red and swollen, springs eagerly from the fabric"
    That could have been phraised some other way, not to break the intense beauty, at least for me.

    And well, now I also realised just what he at some points called her.
    Ok, it was cool to say "...when you pant like a bitch in a heat. So I'm gonna fuck you like one." but then again literally calling a woman 'bitch' seems very much un-Erik-like.

    Then again I don't even know if you meant him to be much IC to any version of him.

    Still, I like this a lot.
    Just if some details and the beginning changed, then I would praise this perfect.

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  • From ANON - Judas on October 07, 2005
    Gees...
    Though I nevr realy like these "you" fics but anyways this...
    Hm.

    Well, first this seemed rather disgusting and poorly written *but* after he tight her up this began to be even beautiful.
    If you can say beautiful of something like this. Oh damn, yes you can.
    Anyway, aftr that point the writing was pure talent.

    First I thought I can't imagine any version of Erik being like that (well, not to Christine at least but then again this wasn'y Christine). It was fun when he took the blade and you'd think he'd actually cut her but then he only freed her to.
    That I can see of him.
    I became to decision this Erik you wrote was more close to, let's say, Kay's Erik than away from him.
    After all he'd grown to love power more than many other things he possesed.
    Therefore his actions and simple little dialogs were perfectly written.

    So, the beginning was a tad too "naked" and disgusting in writing but the rest was indeed very intense and beautiful and well written.
    And the ending was great too. The way she called her Master, but in the very end simply "my love". (:

    Brava!
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  • From ANON - helo on September 27, 2005
    Hello! one word: fabulouuuuuuuuuuus!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    really, you do have a talent there, my friend...

    I love this submitting fanfictions... ***** kissy

    love you*
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  • From ANON - Britt on September 11, 2005
    Holy shit, that was amazing. Vicious but amazingly well written. Hot stuff; I really, really liked it.
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  • From ANON - Amy on September 11, 2005
    OMG....THIS IS FUCKING INCREDIBLE......*fans herself*
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