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Reviews for Emmanuelle

By : TippyMidget
  • From ANON - on September 12, 2016

    Javert is completely out of character and this might as well be a different character it's so far off of who Javert is. Ruined Victor Hugo's character 


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  • From ANON - A Flamer on January 14, 2013
    My God, I've never been so bored and disgusted by a fanfic in a long time.

    Emmanuelle is such a horrible Mary Sue it's not even funny. You don't need to constantly tell your readers how beautiful and perfect she is; it's annoying and repetitive. Why is she always giggling? It makes her seem like a ditz. Plus why does she cry all the time? Nobody over the age of about fourteen cries this much.

    Oh, and I love how you made Javert into a pedophile or an ebepophile in this. I mean, you're constantly going on about how Emmanuelle "sounds like a little girl" and does stuff "childishly," plus how she looks younger than her age. And yet Javert wants to fuck her as soon as he sees her? What? If you were trying to create a squicky situation, more power to you. If you were trying to make it seem romantic, you failed.

    I also love how Emmanuelle is a sex goddess despite being a virgin, all because she supposedly read the Marquis de Sade (who, by the way, wrote torture porn and snuff novels, not bodice rippers. Do some fucking research). And she likes getting facials, AND she can swallow all Javert's semen after giving her first blow job. Did you base her off a porn star or something? More to the point, do you have any idea how respectable young women were raised in the 19th century? I could go on forever about this, but I'll just say this: they wouldn't be so confident about sex. Because they were sexually repressed. It's that simple.

    Javert is so out-of-character he might as well not be Javert. You've succeeded in turning Hugo's complex, badass character into a whiny, self-loathing, abusive clone of Christian Grey. I mean, you have him RAPE his wife to get rid of his frustration? Javert is a harsh man, but he is not a rapist. And then you have him constantly angsting about how he's too old for Emmanuelle and how he's not good enough for her and how he can't live without her...did you even watch the musical? When did Javert ever NOT feel confident in himself, until the end, when his moral compass was completely shaken up? What gave you the idea that he wouldn't be able to move on if his sex toy died?

    By the way, I don't buy that Javert "loves" Emmanuelle at all. His thoughts about her before he marries her can be summed up thus: "Wow, she's hot...I want to bone her...but she's too young for me...to hell with it; she's hot...oh, no! What have I done?...but sex with her is so awesome!" That's not love; that's lust. If this situation were realistic, Javert and Emmanuelle should be having fights and driving each other crazy barely three weeks after they're married. You can't build a long-term relationship on how hot a person is.

    Said long-term relationship is also BORING AS HELL. This fic has almost no plot, except for sex. Occasionally you introduce a plot point that could be interesting if you developed it better...Javert's head injury, Mme. Douvant's disapproval...but these plot points never go anywhere. Either they die in the next chapter, or they're just another excuse for Javert to get frustrated and yell at Emmanuelle, Emmanuelle to throw a tantrum, and the two of them to have hot healing sex. This sequence of events occurs in practically EVERY CHAPTER: Javert gets frustrated, Emmanuelle throws a tantrum, and they fuck. And when Javert and Emmanuelle are not having sex, they're always either talking about having sex or thinking about having sex. It gets old. You could cut out roughly half the chapters of this fic and you wouldn't be losing anything important. Hell, you could write a oneshot PWP where Javert and Emmanuelle have sex and leave it at that, and it would be a significant improvement.

    And your ending; dear God, your ending. I tried to convince myself this was a troll, for the sake of my sanity, but unfortunately, it looks like you were completely serious about it. Emmanuelle's miscarriage and subsequent death came RIGHT THE FUCK OUT OF NOWHERE. There was no proper lead-in to it, no foreshadowing, no proper attempt to work it in to the rest of the chapter. Did you just get tired of the fic and decide to end it on a whim? Because it's exactly how that chapter reads. Moreover, it renders the rest of the fic completely pointless. If Emmanuelle only lived for a month, what the hell was the point of writing fifteen chapters about her? Why did you even bother marrying her to Javert? Again, why didn't you just write one sex scene between Javert and Emmanuelle and leave it at that? And then you had the nerve, the BALLS, to mention your horrible character in Javert's big scene at the end. Your mention of Emmanuelle and how Javert was so excited to go see her completely cheapened Javert's suicide. It ruined the impact that Valjean's act of mercy had on Javert.

    The question in your summary states, "Can Javert surrender some of his dedication and be a family man"? The answer to that question is a resounding NO. Because doing so would totally go against his character. Javert is the personification of an unstoppable force: in this case, justice and the laws of society. You say in your fic numerous times that he's "sworn his life to the law," but I don't think you understand the full implications of that. He views things in black and white--remember his attempt to arrest Fantine, because he just couldn't conceive that a prostitute could be abused by a bourgeois man? Remember his pursuit of Valjean? If he doesn't feel guilty over this, he is not going to feel guilty over upsetting a strange girl with a crush on him. Even if he somehow did decide to get married, it would be to a woman as stern, cold, and uncompromising as he was. Giggly little Mary Sue isn't going to bring out Javert's soft side with the power of true love and "ample breasts".

    Your grammar and spelling are good, and you clearly did a little research on the setting, but those are the only good things I can say about your fic. Otherwise, it's a boring, OOC, plotless mess, which features one of the worst Mary Sues I have ever read about--and I regularly hang around in the Lord of the Rings fandom, so that's saying something. The only possible way this fic could be saved is to reduce it to one chapter of sex, or to have Emmanuelle killed off in the first few chapters.
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  • From SlaveGirl on August 11, 2011
    Just read all your chapters and I absolutely love tbs story. You're characterization of Javert is fantastic and very believable. I always thought Javert had a soft side somewhere inside, but you don't lose his darker undertones and emotions. Emmanuelle is also very interesting because you don't have her play the total soft to Javert's hard. She is very interesting and I am excited to see what you write next!! Update soon!!
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