rate_review Reviews

loved it and always love these together. great job and thanks for sharing with us.

wow. that was really good. i figured doyle would top frost. well done.

I love the ending line--works great. The sex seems fine if a bit generic slash/yaoi. There are two typos were a couple of words sort of repeat/blur together--it might be AFFs fault or maybe your file upload?

Anyway, good job!

Man oh man, it got hott in here. That was yummy. Thnx

CheekyWeeDevil,
Dezi @}-

very awesome...Doyle and Frost make such an interesting pair ne?

Hmmm....yummy Frost and Doyle goodness. This was definately an excellent story.

I love you! Finally someone else wants to see them together! I like Merry and Frost, but Doyle and Frost is even better. Thank you for writing those of us who only fantasize. Write more, what would happen if the others find out?

Excellent! It's a rarity to find fic like this. Not only do ill ill believe Doyle is Doyle and Frost is Frost, but you make their coming together seem so real, like it was happening in the book. I have to admit I haven't finished the second Merry Gentry book, or even started on the third, but with what I've read, Frost and Doyle are at the top of my list in the "crew".

Just one note, and take this as a grain of salt if you want cause I really did enjoy this, but there a few sentences that might be considered too long and should maybe be their own thoughts/sentences. Just kind of an example:

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Doyle pushed himself further against Frost’s skin, nakedness against nakedness, they merged with one another, their flesh glowing like the moonlight as their pace quickened and Frost reciprocated Doyle’s actions by taking Doyle’s painfully hard cock into his own hand and began pumping it in rhythm to his movements.
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Although I could still easily follow the stream of thought, it might sound better as:

e pue pushed himself further against Frost’s skin. Nakedness against nakedness, they merged with one another - their flesh glowing like the moonlight. As their pace quickened, Frost reciprocated Doyle’s actions by taking the dark man's painfully hard cock into his own hand and began pumping it in rhythm to his movements.

Again, this is just my preference, but I wanted to leave something constructive for you since I enjoyed this so much. I hope you try your hand at something in this area again soon! You're great at setting up a scene with enough description to satisfy the reader, giving clear descriptions of what the characters are doing, and adding the right amount of emotion to give it the depth it needs.

That was just lovely sugar. I've always thought Frost and Doyle should have their own story whether past, present or future of the books. Thank you for this gift.

Great story. Homosexuality is rampant in the Farie courts and I'm not at all suprised that frost and doyle were lovers at one point. Your writing style is very close to Laurall K Hamiltions and like I said I'm very impressed.