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August 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL, my nick name's Mimi ^_^ i have black hair, but brown eyes. Good story so far!
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January 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wendy would have lived during the early 1900's, right at the turn of the century. She would have only been your great-great grandmother assuming you are in your teens........ Keep going.........
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November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
cool i like it dont worry i hate wendy as well i dont why ANYWAY keep righting
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November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
cool i like it dont worry i hate wendy as well i dont why ANYWAY keep righting
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You should continue with this. Good start!
It seems that Wendy had an obsession of her own judging from Mimi's dark hair and blue eyes. If you get my meaning. I bet there's more to that story in her journal.
Wendy's diary could break Peter's heart and Mimi would be there to pick up the pieces. ;-)
It seems that Wendy had an obsession of her own judging from Mimi's dark hair and blue eyes. If you get my meaning. I bet there's more to that story in her journal.
Wendy's diary could break Peter's heart and Mimi would be there to pick up the pieces. ;-)
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's a good start even tho you don't like Wendy. Looking forward to your next chapter.
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March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Man that chapter was so freaking short. But it was good, I hope to see more when you update.
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February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you have excelent skills when writing. no funkey words in the wrong place and relativley well thaught charichter developement. but i would look into your spelling. (im a Hippocrite=notice the selling...= but i was hoping a little constructive criticism will help.) keep up the good work looking forward to reading the rest.
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June 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Good start. You had quite a few typos using she when you meant he. Also wendy was probably Mimi's Great Great Grandmother. 4 greats is a bit much. I'm 32 and my great great grandmother lived as a teen in the 1860's. I suspect the story of peterpan was in the late 1800's or even right at the turn of the century. I don't mean to nitpick. You have great potential! Keep writing!
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May 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yep Wendy sucks, continue.