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May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
dear god that sucked...
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey i like your story its really good!!! thought about adding any more chapters??
email me!
email me!
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April 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not as steamy as i hoped
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hm... Interesting
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That was a little awkward to read. I can understand the jumping around from perspective to perspective, but this is insane. You need to develop your ideas more, add detail into your work, and try to refrain from putting ‘Mia’s POV’ and whatnot to distinguish the change. A simple break in paragraphs would work fine enough. I think that you should write more, just expand on your ideas.
ciao,
cope
ciao,
cope
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February 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No offense, but the site is for adults and you CLEARLY can't possibly be an adult by any stretch of the imagination. LIttle kiddies should not be writing about things they know nothing about. Your writing reads like a grade school assignment with some amateur smut added in. What is it with adding "I can't spell OMGWTF!!!111" in the middle of the story, anyway? Bad, bad writing.