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Your fic was very interesting, but you could have added more details about what the count did to klaus. Im just a sick, sadist, crazy boy. Ha ha, but your fic was very good, especially in the middle of the night. You should put up another chapter cause its really good.

Not bad not bad, perhas a sequal or something to bring this out.

oh wow....this was so sad! i really wish there were more stories w/ count olaf in it, just cause he's the main villan! i kinda wish he picked violet cause she could probably think of a gadget that totally kicks his ass! lol. but seriously, u should definatley continue this! what will klaus be like now? what will violet do about it? and will count olaf ever set his perverted drunk eyes on the eldest bauldeire? please continue it!

A few things.

He was wearing a condom? Oh yes because that makes it seem all really and stuff. 'Let me rape you and while i'm at it let me pull this condom out of no where, have put it on (without so much as mentioning it before) because I am so caring and loving. Not going to use lube, but I need that condom!

Next, last time I checked this is the BOOK section. I don't care who looked better int he movie, if you want the moive up it in a movie section, thsi on the other hand in a BOOK section, so it should go along to the BOOK.

Other than that I don't have much to say. Work on it a little more and you might be able to get everything right. Even get better at writing the NC sex, although one thing. One of the most humiliating things is getting pleasure from being rape etc. (which can happen in stories)
So think about that next time you right.

just a pointer.

you use an apostrophe before the 's' if it's possessive.

like 'klaus's book.'

you DON'T use an apostrophe if it's plural.

like 'the books'

that would make your writing a lot better. it annoyed me.

the story isn't bad. You need to work on your spelling and grammer though. Its very distracting when you get your there/their and your/you're messed up.

whick opening? upper or lower?
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omgosh that was so sad. plz write more ASAP and make it a lil happy

I agree with the comment above, and dear god do you need help with your punctuation. That story was horribly depicted, and your grammar is..to say the least, miserable. Work on it some more, and try using your computers spell check or something.

Have you no clue as to the difference between the possessive and the plural? Please, get some basic knowledge of English grammar before you attempt to write anything further.