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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi Spikes bint,
Glad to see you back here. This story was mostly interesting and mostly well-written. At top of last paragraph, there are several sentences crashing into each other.
"Raoul placed the music box on her grave, he stood back to sit in his chair, when he noticed the red rose, resting on the edge of her gravestone." The tale seemed a bit rushed. There was a funny section.
Christine: Do me now, Erik.
Erik: I will. But, pooh, I dont know what to do.
Christine: Thats ok...never mind...here, let me lead.
Poor Erik. He could have gone off and lived a life of his own, with another woman, who truly loved him. Instead, he lingered behind...hoping to steal a little bit of another man's woman, another man's happiness.
The last man I dated did just that. Before we dated, while we dated, and after we dated.
Glad to see you back here. This story was mostly interesting and mostly well-written. At top of last paragraph, there are several sentences crashing into each other.
"Raoul placed the music box on her grave, he stood back to sit in his chair, when he noticed the red rose, resting on the edge of her gravestone." The tale seemed a bit rushed. There was a funny section.
Christine: Do me now, Erik.
Erik: I will. But, pooh, I dont know what to do.
Christine: Thats ok...never mind...here, let me lead.
Poor Erik. He could have gone off and lived a life of his own, with another woman, who truly loved him. Instead, he lingered behind...hoping to steal a little bit of another man's woman, another man's happiness.
The last man I dated did just that. Before we dated, while we dated, and after we dated.
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Truly one of the best phanphics I have ever read. The length was quite refreshing, as well as the grammar and spelling. I love how you intertwined the plot of your story with the ending of the movie. Stunning. And the plot was VERY nice--a welcome change from the normal "Christine and Erik have sex and forget about Raoul and go off and live happily ever-after and Raoul is never heard again" or "Christine and Erik have sex and forget about Raoul and go off and then Raoul comes back for vengeance and Erik kills him and then they live happily ever after".
Beautiful. The one thing I would nitpick about is something you should NOT FEEL BAD ABOUT. This is something I see too often in E/C phics, and it's not just you/your fault. In all the sex scenes--except for one, "Sweet Sixteen"--it seems like Erik never gets ANY FOREPLAY. Christine does, but he doesn't. Come on, people. Erik is extremely sensitive, and he has also never really been touched intimately by a woman. Can you imagine the fun Christine could have with that?! *snerk*
*cough* I cut myself off with the ALL-FAMOUS SNERK. I don't want to rant in this review. I loved your story; it was beautiful. I shall be looking for more from you.
Beautiful. The one thing I would nitpick about is something you should NOT FEEL BAD ABOUT. This is something I see too often in E/C phics, and it's not just you/your fault. In all the sex scenes--except for one, "Sweet Sixteen"--it seems like Erik never gets ANY FOREPLAY. Christine does, but he doesn't. Come on, people. Erik is extremely sensitive, and he has also never really been touched intimately by a woman. Can you imagine the fun Christine could have with that?! *snerk*
*cough* I cut myself off with the ALL-FAMOUS SNERK. I don't want to rant in this review. I loved your story; it was beautiful. I shall be looking for more from you.