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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AUG! CLIFFIE! EVIL CLIFFIE! Come now, that's just not fair, leaving us hanging like that! Next chapter soon...please? *Sniffle*
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay, new good omen fanfic! We need those here!
The fic seems very promising this far, i really like how you describe the characters, especially Aziraphale. He was so cute sniffling about the 'enjoying things' comment. poor angel. As for criticism - Crowley could use a wee bit more sharp edges in my opinion, but maybe that's only me and my attraction to total bastards (who get the angels in the end). And just a technical detail: some of your sentences are quite short, which makes the narration a bit fragmental, so you might try to sneak a few little words here and there just to make it more flowing.
but it ain't bad, i like the fic it's good, and what's most important is that you write more, 'cos i definately want to know what happens next.
oh, and just bitching it off... Crowley's leather couch is white, not black. (i actually checked.. x_x)
The fic seems very promising this far, i really like how you describe the characters, especially Aziraphale. He was so cute sniffling about the 'enjoying things' comment. poor angel. As for criticism - Crowley could use a wee bit more sharp edges in my opinion, but maybe that's only me and my attraction to total bastards (who get the angels in the end). And just a technical detail: some of your sentences are quite short, which makes the narration a bit fragmental, so you might try to sneak a few little words here and there just to make it more flowing.
but it ain't bad, i like the fic it's good, and what's most important is that you write more, 'cos i definately want to know what happens next.
oh, and just bitching it off... Crowley's leather couch is white, not black. (i actually checked.. x_x)