rate_review Reviews

ok first off get A beta and rewrite this story. the gramer is horrible, the story seems ok I guess but needs work alot of it. I couldn't get into the story it was lacking emotions and seems like something was missing. To have a reader caught up make them want to read it use emotion and be more descriptive, I've read better pwp then this

omg.....um....i'm scared to asked for you to continue but i want to see how the guys react to this.