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It's kind of sad, because this could have been really good. It's clearly different, so if you wanted, you had the ideas to make something memorable... But really, it felt like even you weren't taking your own story seriously. Which may very well have been the case, I don't know. But if that's the case, what are you doing here? If you wanted to write something worth while, take a little more time with your ideas, flesh them out a little. (Eg. Jacob hunting down Edward could have been a whole story in itself... or at least a full chapter.) Describe the how, and why, instead of just the string of events that makes up your plot. You'll end up with better stories as a result.

I thought it was good. But man It also shocked the hell out of me. You can write some good AU stories. But I kind of didn't like the whole eatting the dead baby thing. But I'm a mom so what can I say. But good story great twist. :) Keep up the good work.