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January 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
you had better have it up hehe.
i man this was good really good hehe.
i man this was good really good hehe.
schedule
January 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wouldn't Bella have noticed the body temp. difference? Other than that, I loved it!
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January 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hehehe wow can't wait for more.
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January 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi I'm stoked to be your first review! Okay so I read your story and I like it... the descriptive speech was well done and the idea was imaginative! It was a good story please write more :)
Okay some constructive critisism is to consider using more paragraphing in your future stories just to make it a little easier on the eyes if you know what I mean...
But other than that I loved it and I hope you have more where that came from!
~MrsJasperHale
Okay some constructive critisism is to consider using more paragraphing in your future stories just to make it a little easier on the eyes if you know what I mean...
But other than that I loved it and I hope you have more where that came from!
~MrsJasperHale