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Reviews for She Did Not Go.

By : dark1starr
  • From ANON - MarieMJS on January 05, 2006
    I was so glad to see not one but TWO chapters to read today, the love revelation was absolutely cute, and so many things happened already... Its fantastic to see Aslan again, and hopefully we won't have to wait too long to read what's going on with the two thrones, and what's next for the two lovebirds(gonna check AFFN every day!!!)... Great Job!
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  • From ANON - Amanda on January 05, 2006
    I absolutely LOVE it! That was a great but very mean cliff-hanger. You should update, like now! Keep up the great work.
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  • From gothdarkkedragon on January 05, 2006
    **nodnodnod** Would have to agree. Well thought out, and actual character development. Need/want more now. Oh, wait. Have it, need to edit it. **meeps** My bad, will get it soon. **poofies to place called 'Real World' for thing called 'work'.**
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 05, 2006
    how sweet i love it
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  • From dark1starr on January 05, 2006
    Mostly, you just have to keep in mind who theyy are and how they have been acting together thus far. Their conversations are probably always a bit odd. Nothing is really broken up persay. You just have to remember they are riding, they are distracted, very shy and have great amounts of tension between them. It isn't a bad tension but it can make things feel odd when you read it. Put your self in their place.

    You are nervous and around a crush that you have had for ..a number of years. I don't know about anyone else but I have had some very odd conversations my self when in a similar case. I think it involved little to nothing and bread. Weird..I know..but I am trying to portray a sense of realness and want to build up that moment between them. Even if it is only a lot of talking for two days. They , in truth would have years and years to make for otherwise.

    Bearing this in mind as you read helps. It makes perfect sense to me but I am the writer. It makes sense to others too so..this is really the only advice I can think to give. As for the rest, Thank you all for the reviews. Thank you SO SO much. Lets keep them coming. This story loves to see them.


    Thanks again everyone.

    Starfyre
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  • From ANON - Faery on January 05, 2006
    I wanted to let you know that I am really enjoying this fic. There are some places where the dialogue is a bit odd or stilted, but overall, you are doing a very nice job. I like how you are building up their relationship rather than just writing smut with no plot. It's very refreshing to see someone take the time to write a well-thought-out adult fanfiction.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 04, 2006
    add on. ADD ON
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  • From ANON - sumak on January 04, 2006
    wow he actually said it to her but now the question is does she love him and if she does will she tell him now review folks and let see if we can find out
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  • From luna26 on January 04, 2006
    Well I was supposed to be working but somehow have become totally sucked into this story! Love it, keep those chapters coming .. :)
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  • From ANON - Earwen on January 04, 2006
    *SQEEEEEE!!!!!!* OH SO CUTE! OMG!! WOW! What a wonderful chapter! Oh i love you man! lol Yay he finally said it! Oh i am dying to know what will happen next! *SQUEEEE*! lol

    please update soon! you rock!!
    Youre doing excellent even without a beta so no worries hun! lol

    fair writing,

    Earwen/Maeg
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  • From ANON - Butterbear on January 04, 2006
    That is so romantic. I always thought Tumnus had a thing for her in the books. I didn't read many of the Narnia fics here because they suxed. You are a very versitile writer. Okay, Write more!



    Butterz!!!!!

    Hugz n Kisses!!!!

    Oh and also.....


    Please Write more!
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  • From ANON - Nicole on January 04, 2006
    Please hurry and write the next chapter!
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  • From amazingenthusiasto on January 04, 2006
    Chapter three was a very sweet chapter. Your Tumnus is very jittery and adorable. Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - Donovan Stryfe on January 04, 2006
    **tilts head slightly** Have I mentioned how much I love your writing? Abso-fab characterizations. **nods**

    Just something about Kale... sort of familiar. ;)

    And will have them back to you shortly.
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  • From ANON - Anonymus on January 04, 2006
    wonderful story. Keep going!!!
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